A Topic, Please Critique!

[Jake]

Please Critique! I know i need to improove, but i just dont know where to start! PLEASE Help Me!
Okay, SO i used to be on ourWorld forums (RElated To ourworld.com) and i made a freebie shop, when sombody orderd from me, i drew them! This is the latest drawing i have done of someone! Her Name on ourWorld is GUMMLBAR, So Thansk Why its on the image!
*I Tried Transparency!*

http://i46.tinypic.com/25sr5sk.jpg
& this:

[ehoeveler]

Hi, Jake; What help do you need? This is a very cute,
color-coordinated 'GummiBar'.
Are you asking why the fonts are on the image?
What app are you using to create?
Thanks, E

[Jake]

Hi, Jake; What help do you need? This is a very cute,
color-coordinated 'GummiBar'.
Are you asking why the fonts are on the image?
What app are you using to create?
Thanks, E

Im Asking for a critique! idek, just it doesnt look right
Thanks for the Comment!
And I Usea Wacom Tablet/Mouse & Paint Tool Sai!
Ill try and Find the Original

[ehoeveler]

Well, Gummi looks cute - I'd add a little more blush to her cheeks.
What exactly don't you like about her? E.

[Jake]

Im Just Not Sure About The Hair, It Doesnt Look right to me :X
btw: Thanks!

[ehoeveler]

I really like the design of her hair - what do you think about the color? E.

[Jake]

I like the Color,
Just people always say it looks like a gradient.
Does it?
~Jake

[ehoeveler]

Yes, it does. What more would you like to do with "her"?
Streaks, strand definition, shading/highlighting?
Sounds like it's time to whip out that tablet and start experimenting! E.

[Jake]

Yup!
Got it with me right now!
Ill PM You if/when i have questions!
Im Thinking about making an "Art Gallery" here on the forums!