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Postby roxy-foxy » Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:21 am

I would like to show you my fist attempt to portray a nude.

Please share your opinion.

Passion, Acrylic on canvas, size 10"x14"

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Anelia
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Postby johnwalkeasy » Sat Feb 03, 2007 7:41 pm

When I looked at the 1st picture. My 1st though was I would like to see this kind of work with a full person. Then I seen the 2d picture. And I think it,s a fantastic work. The light skin tone. the golding blowing hair the position of the girl and base . The golden background. The white toches in her hair the movement. This work is to good for words. I love it.
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Postby Erika Takacs » Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:25 pm

Hi Anelia,

I had to come back to your post repeatedly, because I wanted to give you an honest opinion.

For a first try is more than wonderful. You've got the talent, you've got the skills and the idea is great! But...I've got a problem with the title. I don't see passion on her face or her body. It's a wonderfully painted body and posture, but somehow not appropriate. I would suggest try a different title, or a new version with a more natural body language.

Hope to see more of your works,
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Postby Singular » Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:44 pm

Hello Anelia,
It's nice to see you back. You know I love your work.

This one is good, but I think you can be great, so there are things that could be better. I see very little expression in her face. Looking at this painting does not convince me that she has passion. I do not get that feeling. Maybe the problem is the size of the painting. It would be very hard to fit that kind of detail on such a small canvas.

The composition and design is very good. I like that very much. The lighting and shadows are very good. I would like to see a bit more detail in the body of the woman. I want to see more strength there. I want to see the deep colors a bit deeper and the body a bit smoother.

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Postby roxy-foxy » Mon Feb 05, 2007 3:19 am

Thank you John, Erika, Joe!
You know how much I value your critiques.
When I’ve started painting I realized that the size I’ve chosen wasn’t the best from artistic point of view, but that is the life I had to make my choice based on rather practical than artistic considerations (I was travelling).
I kind of agree with you about the name it is ambiguous especially when I use the naked body to visualize an idea about passion for music and desire for freedom of personal expression. I actually didn’t want to focus on the naked body, because it is a symbol only, I guess that was the reason for not portraying it in high level of detail. Honestly you can’t see much of a detail in such light and movement. Posture is a snapshot of a dancing and playing artist completely absorbed by the music. Outside world doesn’t exist for her, she doesn’t care …
What should be an expression of passion, please describe how you would visualize it.

Thanks a million. :D
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Postby Erika Takacs » Mon Feb 05, 2007 9:35 am

Anelia, now that I know what you wanted to achieve, I've got to tell you that to me the focus of your painting is the naked body and its posture, which is quite theatrical.
If you want to achieve a realistic look, the passion is mostly concentrated on the face, which expresses both pain and ecstasy at the same time. The body is almost one with the instrument. I found some pics, if you want to take a look: http://www.fotosearch.com/photos-images/bassist.html

If you don't want realism, I would only suggest a little more work on her face - I think it will look better. Even if you leave it as it is, it's very appealing!

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lady with musical instument

Postby ehoeveler » Mon Feb 05, 2007 6:39 pm

I love the trees and background, but I hate the subject. I agree with the
others that the picture is mostly well done, but the woman looks like she's
come down with a case of the crabs and is trying to get rid of them by
furiously fiddling her crazy music. Parts of her body are well-formed, but the hands and face need work. Her hair looks like a badly placed wig that's about to fly off. Also, what is that thing under her armpit? Is it a
hanging fold of flesh or is it her hair? From the color, it looks like flesh. There is no grace to her gesture. Overall, I get a tacky, flea-market feel from this one. Sorry, ehoeveler
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Postby Erika Takacs » Mon Feb 05, 2007 10:51 pm

Anelia,

Your work is generating strong and contradictory opinions here (ehoeveler your style is sure unique!), which means it stands out. :)
And that's a good thing!

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Re:lady with musical instument

Postby roxy-foxy » Tue Feb 06, 2007 2:18 am

Dear anonymous (ehoeveler),

Your critique makes me extremely happy. It just proves that I achieved what I wanted. I won't judge you for your language, you are what you are - the student of the “Flea-Market Universityâ€
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Postby ehoeveler » Tue Feb 06, 2007 3:58 am

Dear Roxy; I apologize for the
usque critique. I don't know what came over me because we are all on this site to recieve support and help with
our work. Now, if you can look at yourself in the mirror and really believe that you wanted to paint that way, that is all that matters. You have achieved your artistic goal.
Again, please accept my apologies; feel free to look at my pictures
as well, and tell me what you think. ehoeveler
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Postby roxy-foxy » Tue Feb 06, 2007 4:31 am

Hi ehoeveler,
There is nothing to apologize.
Do you still doubt that I really wanted to paint it like that?
Do you think that her leg through the instrument is an accident?

I can paint everything in many different ways and usually I choose the style to support convening the idea coded in the picture.

I already looked and your paintings. I’ll give you my feedback when see them finished. You are talented and if you are a little bit more open minded you’ll have a great feature.

Regards,
Anelia (Roxy-Foxy is noting but userName)
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Postby ehoeveler » Tue Feb 06, 2007 5:31 am

OK, Anelia; I believe you! I have been accused of being closed-minded
before so I will try to open up. Thanks for your critique on my work and
I will post finished product. Thanks again, Elizabeth
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Postby roxy-foxy » Tue Feb 06, 2007 6:10 am

You are welcome Elizabeth! I’ll be watching for your posts.
Best regards,
Anelia
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Postby djuric » Thu Feb 22, 2007 5:13 pm

You know, this work isnt bad at all. But it isnt finished.
The girls body isnt very realistic, but it doesnt have to be. What should be done right are the proportions. Legs are just too thin compared to her arms.
The other thing that didnt come out well is her face. I guess you wanted her to bow her head. The best thing for you to do is to practice drawing a head in different positions (angles).
I once had a privilege to talk to a great italian painter and sculptor Carmelo Puzzolo when he was in Medjugorje. He said that drawing is one of the most important things for a painter. It was amazing to watch him sketch his next painting and to see that the sketch he made in few minutes was better than many famous paintings...
My biggest remark is lighting. She is lit as if she was standing next to a reflector. It is just too strong. She glows. And the shadows are missing. Where are the shadows on her leg and arm from the instrument? It is very hard to make it right, but that is why the lighting is planned at the very begining of the project.
Anyway, it is a very good first attempt. Just keep practicing.
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Postby roxy-foxy » Fri Feb 23, 2007 1:22 am

Hi djuric

You are right about drawing. I am a student second year Fine Art, still need to learn and practice. I've sketched her when she was playing passionately (in my point of view but for others it could look rather concentrated), it depends on personality. It was dark in the student campus, and she was just next to the lamp (not on the painting), there was another lamp behind her which I included in the painting. She is what she was, not perfect, are you perfect? The shadows are so short when the instrument touches the body, that they have insignificant impact. I portrayed her as close to what I've seen, as I could (Good that I had some experience drawing dynamic objects). There are some details which I excluded (expected somebody to ask for). The idea wasn't to paint sensual nude (tanned and waxed as in porno magazine). I painted it as I wanted, probably more details and smoothness would improve, but the size is too small for that. I will live her in a closed or will sell her on Flea-marked.
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Postby artisticsha » Thu Apr 15, 2010 12:17 pm

Beautiful. I love the glow of the moonlight. You captured it in her hair as well. Great Job!!
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Postby BYart » Fri Apr 16, 2010 8:24 pm

Whew! Such varied reaction! How cool is that? To invoke the viewer's love or dislike in such emphatic ways?
Me, I looked at your painting several times...I didn't see a lack of passion...I see an INTENSE passion. Intensity can certainly be rendered with a stern expression.
I like the lighting as others have commented, and while to be "perfect' in a realistic sense, the body could use a bit more fluidity, I like it the way it is!
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Postby roxy-foxy » Tue Apr 20, 2010 9:51 am

Hi
I wasn't expecting to hear opinions on this old painting....I guess it caught your attention.... Thanks for writing....I am glad you see the passion.

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