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Portrait:something doesn't look right please give a look

Postby lella » Fri Apr 24, 2009 11:28 am

I'm working on this portrait of psychologist CG Jung, I can tell something's not right but I cannot tell what, please any comments very welcome
I'm working on a small picture, not really sharp...and this is supposed to be a present :?
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Postby weirdpuckett » Fri Apr 24, 2009 1:02 pm

I see nothing "wrong." It's great . . . .Did you use charcoal? I like it!
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Postby BYart » Fri Apr 24, 2009 1:32 pm

Hi!
I think you've done a very good job!
To my eye, I think the back of his head is a bit too elongated.
I see you did a great job on his glasses, but I think his ear(on left in image), the top edge needs more definition? As the frame should be setting behind top edge of ear?
Other than that, w/o seeing the reference photo, I'm guessing...is his chin a bit too full on the right edge?
Once again...I think you have done a great job...detail is excellent by the way! :wink:
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Postby knapp » Fri Apr 24, 2009 2:07 pm

The whole head is in sharp contrast, yet the hair is solid white; maybe some subtle shading in the hair.

The shading on the cheek looks darker than it should be, maybe add in some secondary lights to the shadow area here, or lighten the whole area?

Another thing I noticed is that if you divide the face in half, (use your finger or a piece of paper to block out one half) it looks like two different people. Also, usually when one eye is squinting the other one opens up a bit more. I'm no expert in these matters but i hope it helps.
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Postby johnwalkeasy » Fri Apr 24, 2009 3:51 pm

The only thing that comes to my eye. Is his hand . It,s seems to have the look of a younger man. I would make the hand have the look of age.
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Perfection

Postby nigelartist » Sun Apr 26, 2009 4:57 pm

Salvador Dali -

'never sarch for perfection..you'll never reach it.
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Postby DrSirDrawsALot » Sun Apr 26, 2009 11:57 pm

I agree with the head thing. Looks kind of weird. Maybe put more depth into the hair, or something. Otherwise, this is very good!
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Thanking

Postby lella » Tue May 12, 2009 4:16 am

many thanks to all for your very detailed advice, I really needed some fresh eyes! I've made some changes Thank you!! :D
to weirdbuckett: I used graphite, I 've only started drawing portraits last year I still have to try charcoal :wink:
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